After reviewing hundreds of opening pages, here's the most common mistakes I've found.
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00:00 Introduction
00:23 Clickbait first sentences
04:29 Low Rate of Revelation
10:31 No taste of USP
15:53 Not understanding the 6 Opening Options
26:25 Overwhelming readers
28:15 Thinking this has to be perfect

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